Writers+Memo18

Writers Memo Chloe P.

There is some of my writing that I think “ Yes, this is the best piece I have ever written!” and then I look back at the beginning of the year writing that I have done and think “ This could use a lot of work!” Now, I thought since we were going to be re-writing one of our beginning of the year pieces I thought I could write a wonderful and more 6th grade writing story, if I chose my fiction story. The writing that Mrs. Jordan has been teaching us now at the end of the year is the writing that makes me feel great like, “ This is fantastic piece.” Then, I thought what this story needs is a more 6th grade intro so I played around with some words and then came up with writing that has just blew me away.

The thing that I thought I needed to change first and thought that needed lot more help on, was my beginning of the story. I thought it was not end of the year 5th grade quality writing. It needed some work on so I gave it a little sugar and spice and it turned out really nice. The beginning of my writing was just not me. It was something that my readers would be interested in. So I thought why don't we share the relationship of siblings while we have the characters go on a adventure. There will be a very messy and mean sister and a very clean and talkative brother, why don't we have them notice the things that each sibling don't notice in each other tell later in there life, that we are all family and that you should not judge then by what they do or how they dress. We all love our families so it is not nice to judge them.

The second thing that I changed was the detail that I was giving my readers. They would not be interested at all. All readers want something that is fun to listen to and something that they can kind of relate too a little bit. So I thought that some of my writing could be a little more detailed. Because who does not what to read a good piece of writing? So why not give that readers what they want to hear. A good piece of detailed writing just the right amount of detail, speaking, figurative language, and word choice. Just a little bit more than I would usually put in a piece. One of the things that I did very well on was I explaining in detail what the brother and sister think of each other and what they don't tell each other very often.

The third thing that I changed in my writing was my word choice just 4 or 5 really good words that you think someone else might or might not know. Something that could just make your readers think wow they have good word choice and they are very detailed. That is the key to writing you have to write something that you would wan to hear is to, not something too long. Just go for the gold and try to do your best with your writing. The word choice is something that everyone should have int here writing. I love my piece and the word choice that comes with it is phenomenal.

The next thing that I changed in my writing was my ending you what to hear a good ending something that either ties the whole piece to gather. Or something that might knock the whole thing down like for instance a cliff hanger. Someone reads a book or a mystery story and it just ends in a way that no one would predicate so. My ending was about the two kids fighting, who wants to read an ending like that instead I ending in a way that people would open up and find the imagination in them selfs that people thought they never had. I am really proud of my writing and what I have done with this piece.

Finally, I changed the feelings that the characters felt towards each other in my other. I wrote about how these siblings get along all day and how they never fight, but really when you are family with them you are supposed to fight. Jasmine was a little sweetheart and then henry was a perfect little boy. But really no siblings are like that. So I had to give something that was funny but something that people could relate to. Those are the things that I have changed when I got the opportunity to re- write my fiction story.