Writer's+Memo+15

__**Writers Memo**__ **By: Casey O.** This piece of writing was a brainstorm idea from our “Writer's Workshop,” activity. In “Writer's Workshop,” I spoke with a lot of characters and it seemed to me that it got confusing at times who was speaking! After reading over it I have noticed a lot of mistakes I have made and of lot of miss-used grammar I can fix. So I choice this piece to be more descriptive with my word choice, have better grammar usage, and to really catch the reader with the actions going on. The first part of my story I revised was when I was talking about my main character and his life. At first it my story said “ Hi I'm Shane Paxton; I'm eleven years old.” Then it goes on to say about his appearance. Then it talks about Shane's life and family. Instead I switched his appearance with his life and family. So my reader can get to know Shane a lot better and then see in their mind what he looks like. By doing that it catches my reader more than before. Then when I got to his Shane's appearance it said “ I'm short for my age and have these insane pointy ears that I get hassled for it.” Instead I changed it to “I'm